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    dots Submission Name: Love's Revelationdots

    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove's Revelationdots

    Love is a beautiful thing,
    it brings great joy,
    and an unbearable pain.

    Love unites us,
    and can break people apart.
    It's an unpredictable feeling,
    so fragile,
    yet so strong.

    The joy in love,
    is the compassion that you feel for one,
    you will do anything for them,
    and they will do the same for you.
    It is a union that isn't easily broken.
    It's a kiss goodnight,
    and a hug when you are entrapped in sorrow.
    It's the joy of love.

    The pain...
    You think you love one person,
    but you realize that you love another more.
    So a heart is broken,
    shattered into peices.
    That is the pain that you can experience from love.

    Submitted on 2006-10-14 19:21:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      MMM... from what I've read of yours, this is way off from your style. To be completely honest the short lines and long looped together made it hard to read. My eyes told me to skim rather than read. But the concept is good, as you already know.

    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow great job with this.. .I .. can relate .. as i'm sure many can :) keep writting


    Thanks for posting
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you did a splendid job describing the ineffable phenom that is love.

    this was a real relatable piece too, because love is something everyone goes through.
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]

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