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    dots Submission Name: Paper Tearsdots
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    Author: EscapeArtist8
    ASL Info:    19/F/Delaware
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 6/6/5
    Words: 370
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2177



    Description:
       A Song...


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    dotsPaper Tearsdots
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    (V.1)

    I値l write tear shaped apologies for you.
    Cut them out and paste them on your door
    Fall asleep waiting on your return.
    The floor had never looked so comfortable before
    Inviting me, my knees bending under the weight,
    Placed upon my slim shoulders you so loved
    Under the crack of the door I値l send pleading lines of paper.
    Hearts drawn on for you

    (V2.)

    Outside your door I値l call out all the wrongs I did to you.
    Black them out and throw 粗m down the hall
    Hurting myself I know now in the end hurt you too.
    The misdirected words somehow fell into you.
    I値l show you pictures of every moment I was alone.
    Driving down dark undiscovered roads
    Snapping frames of the rain.
    And the washed out bridge I crossed to come back to you.

    (V3)

    I値l rewrite smudged letters damp from all the crying.
    Apologizing, I never showed these tears to you
    Fall down and offer all the poetic lines I can muster.
    Sing your songs from now till ever after
    Unfreeze the moment I put that look in your eyes.
    Undo the damage I never meant to cause
    Through the crack at the bottom of door I値l reach and touch your hand, Stare back, and prepare for forever

    (Chorus)

    Empty bed falling and leaning, broken from the daylight leaving
    Rest assured I知 coming soon, alone and cold, and if you値l have me I値l be coming home
    This car you know is only half of what it used to be, like you and me, falling apart at the seams
    And did you get all of the letters I sent, I promised to write and I tried,
    Sorry if the words are slightly broken and bent, please see past the dirt to their sweet intent
    I wrote you runaway letters something痴 that matter to me
    Did you burn them, read them first before you tore them into nothing
    And every pay phone call was spent on sending the street names to you
    Just like a lost child calling find me, find me please

    ...I kissed every letter to you...




    Submitted on 2006-10-14 23:07:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not much when it comes to reading songs, they always confuse me. I liked this one, and from what i see you are a great writer.

    Great work.

    Unicorn Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my god i love this, i really do my fav is the first verse, it makes me sad and i love writings that do that, Oh my god the last line makes me want to cry, i love this i love it im gonna add it to my faves, i wish i could write like this.
    Vynom
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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