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    dots Submission Name: This Predicament..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 551
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 977



    Description:
       mm See you open up, and it only goes to show that the price you are willing to take to open up is just not worth it. It goes to show, that some are just ment to stand alone. And personally I'm perfectly fine with that!


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    dotsThis Predicament..dots
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    See....
    This is what I've gotten myself into
    A predicament... I made so long ago…
    But instead I ignore because I longed to be loved…
    To love,
    And do you see where this
    Mistake I've made
    Has put me?
    No?!
    Well it’s put me in such a depression
    That even trying to describe to you would be pointless
    Words cannot go to the measure I need them to
    Although I am here trying…
    I ... I just can't hang on much longer…
    For I have put this on myself…
    I opened up
    I allowed those attempts…
    I ... I am the one to blame here
    Don't you see?
    One can only hurt another if they are allowed…
    And I have allowed …
    I became vulnerable...
    Sigh... And because of this vulnerability…
    I have left myslef here with this broken heart…
    And bleeding wounds…
    That will not be mending ...
    Anytime soon..




    Submitted on 2006-10-15 00:05:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know exacty how you feel, well written, I could feel what you were feeling when you wrote it.
    Your Friend, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]


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