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    dots Submission Name: Doorsdots
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    Author: Draycon
    ASL Info:    18/M/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 7/9/19
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDoorsdots
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    The doors start to open
    I can see the light
    I am almost there
    I can see it now
    Then the doors close
    I have waited so long
    Now I most begin again
    This will be harder
    This time Iím not sure I can
    But I most try
    The doors most be opened
    The doors of her heart




    Submitted on 2006-10-15 01:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is good. some separtion would help after now signifying a change of pace but not my work. i think another would be good after can but again not my work. kudos for a nice write.

    ~Max Ryder
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Max R. | [ Reply to This ]


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