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    dots Submission Name: Unrequiteddots
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    Author: SummerWine
    ASL Info:    34/M/Liverpool
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 1/1/1
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsUnrequiteddots
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    I should have run
    Before blade touched skin

    But fancied
    I could dodge this one

    Wait until the blade
    Grew blunt.

    So I stayed
    And never felt it slipping in.

    The doctor’s verdict:
    ‘Painful not fatal. You’ll heal.’

    I’ll wear the wound
    As a sign.

    ‘Look what happens
    If you don’t get out in time.’




    Submitted on 2006-10-15 18:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...I love this one. It is very powerful, and I think that that has a lot to do with the brevity of the stanzas. Especially the last one, it just works perfectly. A wonderful work...keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]


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