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Your soul


Author: Black-Death
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Your soul



Nothing flowing in and out of it... an empty space where anything can happen.. Death...Life... shall u let go with me into the darkness and flow the emptyness that is your soul?




Submitted on 2006-10-15 19:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's nice. COuld have more, sorta stopped as soon as it was gaining momentum. But aside that it was really nice.
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by mikepyro7 | [ Reply to This ]
  Because the piece is so simple, the word 'Shall' just doesn't quite fit, just a suggestion.

Definitely room for improvement, but definite potential.
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Lipgl0ssed | [ Reply to This ]
  Why do you think your work is bad Mark. I really like it. I love your writing. Its so good. When you write its so meaningful. i love it. keep it rockin'

_*denny ;; [x3]
| Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by given_belief | [ Reply to This ]


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