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    dots Submission Name: The <<<<((((ECHO))))>>>>dots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1332
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    Bytes: 965



    Description:
       just a short freestyle.....nothin serious


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    dotsThe <<<<((((ECHO))))>>>>dots
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    I revert to say let-go, but you act to stand and bounce back like an echo
    I walk through lies, while you speak false statements
    you talk with ya eyes you could say there lost in amazement
    im deep as the ocean is blue, hopin for you,
    headaches of thought like the commotion is screwed
    im lookin for that four leaf clover to give me some luck
    Im tryin to close this door, its over, but the carpet is stuck
    inner voices advise an distract-tasks, knowledge of truth is missed becuz the facts-pass
    with high tones, I still hear sighs on the phone, the pitch is sharp enough to crack-glass
    I loathe reality, betroth this casualty, trial an error but im still enclosed so passionately
    its like tug of war with 4 ropes
    im getting dragged and pulled till my core chokes
    like a frozen river my blood flows with no heat
    im emblazoned to shiver without love an my souls bleak




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      this was amazing. ur metaphors were so creative in this one. i gotta give u props.

    I revert to say let-go, but you act to stand and bounce back like an echo

    im deep as the ocean is blue, hopin for you,
    headaches of thought like the commotion is screwed

    inner voices advise an distract-tasks, knowledge of truth is missed becuz the facts-pass
    with high tones, I still hear sighs on the phone, the pitch is sharp enough to crack-glass
    I loathe reality, betroth this casualty, trial an error but im still enclosed so passionately
    its like tug of war with 4 ropes
    im getting dragged and pulled till my core chokes

    all ill [censored]. definite fave
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      correct me if i'm wrong, but are you trying to escape from someone or something? i read this twice, and that is what it seems to say to me.
    i love the last two lines, it's like a look deep inside yourself, and then realisation.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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