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    dots Submission Name: Better Placedots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsBetter Placedots

    my head is spinning my eyes are red
    im so confused yet its all so clear
    my pillow is wet black stains on my sheets
    make up smudged clothes all ripped
    i sit in the corner and scream to the world
    i hate this life itz all a blur
    the door flies open a fist in the face
    im sorry im sorry i didnt mean it please stop
    over and over to the side of my face
    please no more bruises its just not fair
    i didnt do anything wrong yet i constantly suffer
    your pain and anger is my black and blue face
    i swear i didnt touch him but my words dont mean shit
    he was just a friend we didnt even kiss
    you lay your fists down and throw me against the wall
    take off your clothes you little hore
    i close my eyes and do what im told
    im scared of the punishment the pain it involves
    i lay on the floor as you get on top
    over and over when will it stop
    its finally over with a smile on ur face
    put on ur clothes you ugly disgrace
    your a shame to the family
    you dont deserve a name
    get back in the corner and shut you mouth
    the door slams shut as i lay down and cry
    when will it be over when will i fly away
    i look across the room he made a mistake
    his belt lay across the floor
    i tie the belt to the chain on the wall
    as i climb on the chair i think of my life
    i tighten the belt around my neck
    with one step forward and im in a better place

    Submitted on 2006-10-16 03:56:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a really good poem alot of feeling, and emotions are put in it. and i can relaite.

    | Posted on 2007-01-03 00:00:00 | by EternallyMystic | [ Reply to This ]
      wow....that's moving.good poem nothing could really be improved.i like it though.sorry if that sounds overused ut still goo poem write thingy
    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]

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