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    dots Submission Name: Good Daydots
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    Author: SavedDragon
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    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGood Daydots
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    A fevered mind and restless blow
    Will make the day go unforgotten
    And with our only potency
    We aim to discern our purpose.

    Realization is now a beat away
    Everyday has our acceptance
    Unwillingly, to cope and make coped
    What we hadn't before.

    To make of a day what was reflected
    Would not have been a good one,
    But to have made of what was predestined
    Is a good day indeed.




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 09:24:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this write was mostly going over deep thought, trying to accept and make sense of things that have happened in the past, something alot of people can relate to. And perhaps, you feel that as each day comes you're more and more accepting of things, perhaps things you would rather not be accepting of.

    The last part kinda gets me. To make a day of just thinking about the past would be a waste of a day. But, if it was predestined to be that way, then it was a good use?
    | Posted on 2006-12-26 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm not the best critique person but the last part

    "To make of a day what I reflected
    would not have been a good one,
    but to have made of what was predestined...
    was a good day indeed."

    this is very profound and poetic and i think the perfect ending to a thought-provoking write. way cool!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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