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    dots Submission Name: Secrets and Liesdots
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    Author: Max R.
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33/29/17
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSecrets and Liesdots
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    The secrets we keep
    The lies we tell
    Just so we can sneak around
    And never get found out

    We tell our families
    “I’ll be right there.”
    When you’re really coming here
    You light a match
    To mask the smell
    Of exactly what
    You’ve been doing

    Or maybe you’re in a car
    With that guy your parents hate
    The car is parked
    On lover’s leap
    And you slide into the back

    Or maybe you at that party
    With no parents for miles
    You drink shot after shot
    And jump into your car

    That joint you smoked
    Was laced with LCD
    and now you don’t know what to do

    That boy you love
    Has someone else on his mind
    When he says, “I love you…”

    Those shots you drank
    The ones you thought you could hold
    Are now effecting your driving

    The secrets we keep
    The lies we tell…




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 10:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first i must say the same i say to everryone who has that pic... I LOVE GIR!!! other than that this was a great write and i know a lot of people will be able to relate. keep up the awesome work and i hope to read more by you soon. you area doig great.


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    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh! I know this only too well. Too many secrets I keep from my parents and the lies I tell to keep those secrets secret. Theres just too many of them. And I can't go back on any of them. So I hide them in my closet until I'm ready to review them. This is a great poem and I am adding it to my favorites.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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