She Waits

Author: Max R. Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33 /29 /17 Words: 68

Class/Type: Poetry /Longing Total Views: 554 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 507

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She Waits

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She waits upon her castle of broken dreams And broken hearts She waits for someone To come and take her away Away from the pain The guilt The endless disappointments She waits She waits for someone For anyone To take her away She’s broken inside From all the pain The guilt The endless disappointments And still she waits Forever waiting For someone for anyone She waits

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I can feel the pain and loneliness that the girl in the poem feels. Of something she can only imagine exists. The power of love. I would have broken up the lines a little differently. Made them similar lengths so that it would flow better. But it's not my poem, it's yours. I like the emotions it conveys. Katana

| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

Thoughts covered by a silent passion. The pictures simple, but with some kind of weird power...

| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]

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