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She Waits


Author: Max R.
Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33 /29 /17
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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She Waits



She waits upon her castle of broken dreams
And broken hearts
She waits for someone
To come and take her away
Away from the pain
The guilt
The endless disappointments
She waits
She waits for someone
For anyone
To take her away
She’s broken inside
From all the pain
The guilt
The endless disappointments
And still she waits
Forever waiting
For someone for anyone
She waits




Submitted on 2006-10-16 10:38:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I can feel the pain and loneliness that the girl in the poem feels. Of something she can only imagine exists. The power of love. I would have broken up the lines a little differently. Made them similar lengths so that it would flow better. But it's not my poem, it's yours. I like the emotions it conveys.
Katana
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
  Thoughts covered by a silent passion. The pictures simple, but with some kind of weird power...
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]


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