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    dots Submission Name: She Waitsdots
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    Author: Max R.
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33/29/17
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsShe Waitsdots
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    She waits upon her castle of broken dreams
    And broken hearts
    She waits for someone
    To come and take her away
    Away from the pain
    The guilt
    The endless disappointments
    She waits
    She waits for someone
    For anyone
    To take her away
    She’s broken inside
    From all the pain
    The guilt
    The endless disappointments
    And still she waits
    Forever waiting
    For someone for anyone
    She waits




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 10:38:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can feel the pain and loneliness that the girl in the poem feels. Of something she can only imagine exists. The power of love. I would have broken up the lines a little differently. Made them similar lengths so that it would flow better. But it's not my poem, it's yours. I like the emotions it conveys.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Thoughts covered by a silent passion. The pictures simple, but with some kind of weird power...
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]


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