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    dots Submission Name: Can somebody help me?dots
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    Author: interstate88
    ASL Info:    19 / M / NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 19/25/11
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 714
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    Bytes: 860



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    dotsCan somebody help me?dots
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    Can someone help me,
    help me to find my way home?

    These eyes are closed,
    and this body lay motionless.

    It's hard to imagine,
    how much you miss when you're gone

    And it's hard to see,
    how much people miss me when i'm gone

    It suprises me,
    and shows me how well off i was

    To return home now,
    would be the best thing for me or so i think.

    But that isn't possible,
    i wish it was

    I just don't know,
    i dont know where i am

    I need help to find my way,
    through this dark and scary place

    Is there anyone out there,
    that can help me?

    Is there anyone to help me,
    help me find my way home?




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 12:17:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      cool poem. i dont like that feeling that way. Lost.
    youll find ur way home...
    | Posted on 2006-12-28 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by interstate88 | [ Reply to This ]
      How very sad! A really great write though. I felt compassion for the person in the poem. Is it a true or fiction write? GBY:)
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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