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    dots Submission Name: The Pain I Carry Insidedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Feeling kinda down today!!!


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    dotsThe Pain I Carry Insidedots
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    I get drunk off of shots,
    To cover the pain that sorrounds me,
    But beyond the liquor I see my life rott,
    And these painful thoughts keep hounding me.
    I see the reflection of hell in every drink,
    But I still sip and consume a cure,
    Though I sit there and just think,
    My reality isn't really for sure.
    Some people ask me why so much pain,
    That even though this heavy rain outside,
    Never seems to stop,
    The pain inside will,
    Though deep inside my heart,
    I know it's not,
    All I can do is invision the good,
    Sit back and chill.




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 12:30:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      STOP BEING DEPRESSED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      hhuuummmmm.. dark moments we all seem to have.. and I can picture you sitting and sipping just sitting and sipping.. wondering deep down what next.. but then again maybe not really thinking.. blank stare into no where maybe.. very sweet and to the point.. thanks for sharing....penny
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]


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