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    dots Submission Name: Gamblingdots
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    Author: Unicorn Poet
    ASL Info:    23/F/Salem, OR
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 406/272/46
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 607
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1989



    Description:
       I wrote this just as a kind of comedy about gambling.... just wanna know what you think.


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    dotsGamblingdots
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    My heart races
    As the money slides in,
    - The adrenaline rush -
    Woo hoo, yippie, Ok, let's win!

    I reach for the button
    To increase my bet,
    - Stop, hesitate, -
    No, not just yet.

    Bet one...
    Deal.
    Hold, hold,
    Deal.
    Nothing.

    Bet one more...
    Deal.
    Hold, hold,
    Deal.
    I won 30!

    Should I continue?
    Should I cash out?
    - My money is doubled -
    My mind fills with doubt.

    Bet one more...
    Deal.
    Hold, hold,
    Deal.
    I won 15, woo hoo!

    My heart is racing,
    Bet more... credits fall,
    - Come on just one big win -
    Yet again, I've lost it all.

    Insert 5 dollars more...
    Let's try it again.
    - Maybe this time -
    I'll get the big win...

    Bet one more...
    Deal.
    Hold, hold,
    Deal.
    I won 30... again.

    Should I continue?
    Should I cash out?
    - My money is doubled -
    My mind fills with doubt.

    So I bet more...
    Hey, I won 10!
    - Hesitate, stop, bet -
    I won 30 again!

    You'd think by now
    I'd take it and run,
    - I know I should -
    But it's too much fun!

    Lose some, lose some,
    Another big win!!
    - Back up to 60 -
    So I bet more... again.

    Lose some, lose some,
    I need a big win,
    - Down to 10 -
    I've done it again.

    Bet one...
    Deal.
    Hold, hold,
    Deal.
    Nothing...

    One at a time,
    10 down to one...
    - Should've quit at 60 -
    3...2... down to none.

    That's all I got
    And now I'm broke...
    - Should've taken the 60 -
    Isn't gambling a joke?




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 14:58:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem gave me a good laugh. I thought it was quite funny. I obviously don't gamble so I have no idea how bad a gambeling addiction can get but I think that your writing gave me a pretty good visual of it.

    What really got my attention was the rythm. It was unique, and just so different from others. I really liked that.
    ```Chrissy```
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by XxXPromiseMeXxX | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like how you structured this poem. It's a good depiction of gambleing addiction. and yeah...it is a joke.
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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