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    dots Submission Name: **Bubbledots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 639
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 541



    Description:
       I haven't proof red this yet..i will later..dont have time right now...this was written in about a minute or so. very uick. I have no clue why i wrote this..its not like imm really stuck in a bubble..but enjoy...srry if its bad and a waste of ur time


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    dots**Bubbledots
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    Life under a bubble,
    just isn't the same
    as life under the sky.
    You always have someone
    on your back, waiting
    for your next stupid mistake.
    The next move you make,
    the next time you lie.
    They have this perfect image
    of your body and your face.
    If you don't live up to this standard,
    your bubble grows thicker and thicker,
    until it pops
    and you are left with nothing
    but the sticky residue
    to live out your life.




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 15:06:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HELL YEA!! at last i kno some 1 feels the same.
    i like your work u relate simple things 2 oh so complicated thing , its allsum
    -Xat
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by kantvnh | [ Reply to This ]
      HELL YEA!! at last i kno some 1 feels the same.
    i like your work u relate simple things 2 oh so complicated thing , its allsum
    -Xat
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by kantvnh | [ Reply to This ]
      ok CD this is a very good topic to write about I have been in this situation of being in a bubble many times and it seems like the more u try to avoid situaions with these people who r trying to bring u down the more their eyes r fixed on u . This was the perfect metaphor to compliment. Good write and definitely not a waste of my time :)

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      This is interesting and well thought out Caotic
    We do live our life in a bubble always afraid to do something to help us move forward because we are afraid it might hurt someone else who feels they are helping you to
    This is why I always say you have to learn to Love yourself before you can Love another
    If you Love your self then its easier to help another
    I loved the idea of the bubble though that is very creative
    Great Work
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Preach it girl!!! This came from the heart and more people should feel this way but don't! Anyway great write!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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