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    dots Submission Name: Crimson Sheetsdots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 89/90/40
    Words: 409
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 657
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2704



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       Sometimes I sicken myself with how cruel I am to characters.


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    dotsCrimson Sheetsdots
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    All could see it in her eyes
    A great fear she suffered in life
    This broken, hurt little girl
    Lived in fear of her father
    She reached for love, but found his hate
    So fragile at the age of eight
    Her mother dead, but he remained
    In his child he placed the blame
    All watched at a distance, never acting
    As this girl was a black sheep
    She was alone and without friends
    That's how the story goes
    Without a voice, scars will not mend

    He was drunk that fateful night
    Coming home from the bar
    In his mind he had decided
    How to make his daughter pay
    For she had "gone too far"
    He crept into her room
    Quiet as he could
    Peeling the covers from her body
    Tying her to the wood
    If only she knew what was to happen
    She awoke in pain, to hear him laughing

    Confused, naked
    Covered in blood
    Pleading look towards
    The father she loved
    She couldn't move
    She couldn't scream
    All she could do was hope
    That this was a dream
    Tears streamed from her face
    Only feeding his lust and rage
    Like and animal, tethered and caged
    She vedded and cried, her heart racing
    He carried on despite her pleas
    Stolen innocence, crimson sheets
    She was in pain
    He didn't care
    All she could do was sob and stare
    He left her upon the bed
    Broken, bleeding, left for dead

    No one listened to her
    In spite of what was true
    That such a nice man
    Would actually do this
    She couldn't sleep at night
    Afraid it would happen again
    Still no one acted
    Or believed that he had sinned
    This was a burden she had alone
    Constantly betrayed in her own home
    One night after he had his way
    She decided that's all she'd take

    Waiting 'till he went to sleep
    Silently down the stairs she creeped
    Arming herself with the largest knife
    Knowing what she must do
    No choice but to follow through
    She walked into his room
    Blade held high
    Sick satisfaction in her eyes
    If only he knew what was to happen
    For everytime he had hurt her
    Another incision was made
    His sheets now ran crimson
    Forever broken, forever stained
    She went and got some gasoline
    And burned the house down that night
    The ashes of her pain remained
    But she knew she'd be allright
    Bodies burning, children laughing




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 17:24:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well writtne, but horribley sad and depressing. You truely are an amazing writter. I also actully did find it to long because evry moment was interesting. Hopefully this isn't yor life because if is I suggest you talk to someone get some help.

    And I say this because I knwo where you are coming from i understand more then you will know and I suggest talking so someone will help. It's no life that anyone should live. Good luck and wonderful writing. Truely.
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is a very sad piece. i really hope taht this is fiction. you are an amazing writer. i really hope to read more by you soon. this is an amazing piece. i can't get over it. it is so sad. i love it. i dont really know what to say. i feel speachless but i feel like i want to say something about it. keep up the amazing work. as a writer you are great. no joke. i think if you try you can really take your work and be the best with it. keep posting. i want to read moe by you.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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