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    dots Submission Name: Shadow Of Sinsdots
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    Author: XxXPromiseMeXxX
    ASL Info:    14/F/Washington State
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 32/30/16
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 637
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I just have to say that Death is Death and that's all. I'm not talking about Satan or any other demonic thing. It's just Death so don't misinterpret that while you read this.


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    dotsShadow Of Sinsdots
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    As she walked down the isle
    her dress a peer black
    the roses she's holding
    are dead and intack.

    She walks to the front
    as she meets death
    not scared that she's going
    not afraid of a threat.

    She looks at death
    seeing her faults in life
    all the things she's done wrong
    and then a knife.

    The last bad thing she'd ever done
    before she said goodbye
    looking at the fire
    burning in deaths eyes.

    Death places it's lips
    onto her cheek
    as the day turns dark
    and then she speaks.

    "I have done wrong
    I'm going to hell
    I ended my life
    I was not well.

    People were so mean
    they called me names
    I gave up on life
    and now i'm in shame.

    She fell to her knees
    as death flashed a grin
    she pleaded forgiveness
    for all of her sins.

    Death disappeared
    as she layed down in pain
    her blood turned to tears
    and then came down rain.

    Her eyes wide open
    as she layed in a church
    death had not taken her
    but left her to search.

    She stood in great shock
    all her wounds had gone
    not one little scar,
    nothing was wrong.

    She walked to a window
    looking at her reflection
    her dress was now white
    and the roses had reddened.

    An image followed
    as her shadow dimmed
    it was her shadow that would always follow
    it was her shadow of sins.




    Submitted on 2006-10-16 18:20:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, i almost thought it was a wedding between death and the girl, but then it turned out to be a marriage between her and her shadow.... Great work.

    Unicorn Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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