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    dots Submission Name: Let me godots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Death
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1348



    Description:
       Read my previously submitted piece...thats how I feel still....


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    dotsLet me godots
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    No ones around
    to save me from this
    The world tosses one out
    but I hit and I miss

    I cant stay for a while
    If you could, God, for me
    Im on my last string
    and Im dying to leave

    Let me go
    Cause I know
    that athough you are here
    Im still the one nearing
    the end of my wit
    cant take one more blow
    so just let me go

    Im weightless at night
    and it seems I cant breathe
    I pray out to you
    while inside I seethe

    My eyes changing color
    from white into red
    I know its so wrong
    to wish I were dead

    Please let me go
    Cause I know
    that athough you are here
    Im still the one nearing
    the end of my wit
    cant take one more blow
    so just let me go

    I put down in words
    my intentions absurb
    If your answer is no
    I cant change that I know
    But into my own hands
    I cant tranfer the plan
    I wanna push the rivers that flow
    I wanna I wanna be let go

    Gonna go
    Cause I know
    that athough you are here
    Im still the one nearing
    the end of my wit
    cant take one more blow
    so just let me go







    Submitted on 2006-10-16 20:11:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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