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    dots Submission Name: A Moment in Timedots

    Author: forestspirit
    ASL Info:    21/m/inside
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 58/45/27
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA Moment in Timedots

    This black bird, this pillar of doubt
    A swollen stain and two engulfing mouth.
    Grain of sands, poised on a capillary edge
    White knuckle grip, unbreakable pledge
    Shards of crystal piercing a vein
    Mindless sliver and the crimson stain
    Rhythm and harmony, thoughts becoming one
    Break free and fly like the swan
    That clichéd radiance, brilliance embraced
    Interlocked fear, unification retraced
    Long lost and not found, nothing to regain
    Spring! warm water, welling up in pain

    Hidden secrets, uncovered and bared
    Truth, concealments left unspared.
    Touch like an angel on heaven's street
    Wings to fly, and lift you off your feet.
    Rendezvous at that corner stone
    I won't be there to pick a bone.

    Submitted on 2006-10-16 22:24:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The love was overpowering at first, you can feel it in the beginning of the first stanza, then towards the middle, you can feel the pain, as the love is torn out apart, and they are trying to search for it, seek it out, but they cannot get that feeling back.

    If I am right, then the last stanza is to me, about finding out about an unfaithful lover, and the last sentance is saying he will not be there to pick up the pieces when her new lover hurts her as she just hurt him.
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by faln_angl | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt really get love out of this one. what i got was this lonliness and poverty (financial or emotional) which has led to desperate acts of self harm that have just torn the soul to pieces and desperate reaching out. thats just what i got out of it. either that or a doomed relationship which is killing them both.
    that might be my mood though.
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]

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