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Bleeding In The Darkness

Author: LadyMustang
ASL Info:    42, female, West Virginia
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Bleeding In The Darkness

" Bleeding In The Darkness"

The Darkness within her Soul, It
takes over and runs through her
with it's control.

Takes over her every emotion, Numbs
her heart's deepest devotion.

The darkness comes to her as she sleeps,
Brings to life inside this beautful woman
why her heart weeps.

Her memories come alive within her
dreams, As her heart relives her abusive

The pain she felt from each kick he's
gave, To the scars she is now their slave.

He didn't realize what he did, The darknees
runs deep and within her soul from others she
keeps it hid.

To look upon her beauty you would never
see, How her heart bleeds continusly.

The darkness remembers the noose around
her neck so tight, Hanging from the wall as
her body gets limp and her heart see's the light.

She felt no more would her heart beat she would
die, When you glance upon her loveliness inside
your own heart will cry.

Written By Wilma S. Hill
copyright© October 15,2006
Ladyrose's Poetry

Submitted on 2006-10-17 03:57:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I hope this is not the way you are treated? This was a great peace!!! Your words bring tears to my eyes and I feel pain in what you expressed in this! You Don't deserve this!!!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very interesting pick of poetry....
Telling how love was lost because of the wickedness that partnerships go through. The different temptations we undergo is amazing how some people don't leave someone else for another person, or cheat. I know that happens a lot,'s not easy. Unfortunately things of that nature make it hard to live with the same perspectives as before. Hardens the heart, makes it hard to trust...

Anyways...I liked this one, good choice.
| Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Wilma. Very heartfelt and full of emotion. The circumstance you write about, you describe vividly which makes this very compelling.

Again, very well done.

| Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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