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    dots Submission Name: Ambushdots

    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    As women cry,
    their men fall.
    Without remorse,
    we kill them all.
    We show no mercy,
    THIS IS WAR!!!
    We take no breaks,
    but kill some more!
    They run at us,
    with raised spears.
    they've killed nothing larger
    than a deer.
    We kill each man,
    and burn his farm.
    We Are An Empire,
    they do no harm.
    We attack
    with swords drawn,
    And find our query
    completly gone.
    A fire burns
    all around.
    We'll soon lie dead
    on the ground.

    Submitted on 2006-10-17 09:24:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Weeeeel, a feministicly brutal poem coming from a man. What is the world coming to? :-)
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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