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    dots Submission Name: Day Dreamdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1016
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 620



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    dotsDay Dreamdots
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    Mesmerized
    Hypmotized
    Distorted landscape
    as rain paints
    my window
    I dream
    of seamless stockings
    silk and sandy
    lead to high thigh
    and dissappear under
    umbrella skies
    5 fingers slide
    to crease and glide
    soft against your most
    sensitive skin
    We begin the sin
    10 thumbs
    please you as one
    fill your lungs
    let it out
    with pouts and shouts
    bitten lips
    and sunkin ships
    a treasures found
    in the simple sounds
    of rain against my
    window paine.




    Submitted on 2006-10-17 13:55:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this poem. Its erotic but not slutty. Lustful and companionate. It shows great rhythm and good choice of words. wow Its defiantly hot. *Smiles* Keep them coming.

    Crystal
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by fallen_angl_2 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a short and sweet poem very well written and the flow is nice. Great job.
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure if it was intentional, but this is sexy. i like this a lot, it has a beat all it's own, runs smoothly and i feel is a little erotic. not much, just a hint.
    i have nothing negative to say about this, it's definately to my taste, think i'll add it to my favs.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cool poem, I see like your Idol you chose to be like water. Your flow is awsome. The is kinda hot too. Keep'em coming.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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