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    dots Submission Name: Thurstdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1151
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThurstdots
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    The air is heavy
    like cracked bones
    and smooth stones
    you fold my fears
    and skip them upon my memory
    A desert landscape
    once cracked with pain
    now graced with rain
    you flood me
    Life grows
    as my blood flows
    you wet your lips
    Sip Slowly
    like a fine wine
    at the feast of famine
    With a dancers grace
    you brought life to space
    once empty to movement and faith
    Still I walk away
    as if to say
    I dissearve the deserts disgrace.




    Submitted on 2006-10-17 14:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it~it come over as a love and all it gives kind of
    pain~
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      Rhyming's excellent, the rythm is fast and even though it's a bit abstract the expression are excellent. It's a really good poem and you should be proud of it.
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      You have away of writting like know one else.
    You maybe ahead of your time. I'm not sure if I'm spelling his name right but, You remind me of a Rapper called Rakim(Rock-kim) of Eric B. & Rakim. He to was ahead of his time.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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