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    dots Submission Name: RedemptSINdots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1465
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 763



    Description:
       bored write.. a mix of poeticness and lyrics...

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    dotsRedemptSINdots
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    Notice the stench of a life lived in ruins, I speak-vent-full
    the gods to worship entomb my sanity like Greek-temples
    weak-elementals chained to bleak events that are mental
    distorted dignity dragged dormant to doom distinct-detriments
    of gentle genocide, sentimental suicides,
    heated fortunes like the continental rise of the bluest tides
    Hellonodic judgments like a jury to abrade the soul of a hellion
    like starved lions feasting on slaves, just try to control the rebellion
    divine to hell as an alien, life symbolic like the bell to trail again
    darkness of collaged turmoil, resting tyranny on a pew of convention
    It echoes to reverb, etched to recoil eschewed from RedemptSIN




    Submitted on 2006-10-17 17:48:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      woosh bubz u muzt have a lot on ur mind, to cum out with this, im surprised ur running out of subjects to write about, i liked this, its refreshing.
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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