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    dots Submission Name: What is Helldots
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    Author: freak_like_me
    ASL Info:    20/female/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    4.81 - 120/118/49
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 703
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    Description:
       Its like, well a short collection of what I would find to be Hell. Just as it is a term most often used religiously I thought I would put a little extra into this one and bring out the mortality in Hell also :D :D


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    dotsWhat is Helldots
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    What is Hell?
    Well...
    For me
    Much like I'd imagine it to be

    The day my lover wants another
    And the threat of a mass holocaust
    Of extermination
    With all that, which is radioactive

    But what is Hell?
    Well...
    For me
    This is much like what I'd imagine it to be

    Flying, yes its so unnatural
    For those who are not granted to
    And as you expect
    One more air disaster

    What is Hell?
    Well...
    For me
    It's much like I'd imagine it to be

    Another death
    Another disappointment
    Another newborn
    Another war

    What is Hell?
    Well...
    For me
    It's much like I'd imagine it to be

    Living.




    Submitted on 2006-10-18 06:27:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very good analogy and conclusion for the definition of hell!

    This is a superb poem and I enjoyed reading it.

    Well, we got heaven here on earth too!

    First, we got the rich folks who steal from the poor folks and claim they are living in a glorious and a fabulous heaven.

    Then, we have ordinary people born pssessing special gifts and talents from God and they know how to spread love, joy and peace, by rapping their arms around the world.

    These people live in spiritual heaven and have direct access to God's kingdom, because their goal is to teach love and lead people to the promise land.

    God gave us the will to choose in life, heaven or hell
    The devil is always looking for weakest in the spirit of mankind.

    Keep sharing and writing great poetry. Please drop in and read some of my poetry.


    FireFly747
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      A great piece. It is a bit disheartening. If one believes in life after death and living is hell then what succeeds living, another hell? And how does one escape that cycle of hell? If there was no life after death then why do we spend the only chance at life in hell.
    What is Hell?
    Well...
    For me
    Much like I'd imagine it to be
    I would suggest that you not repeat this again until the end where you say hell is living, I think it would “up the wow factor”. Generally a good job.
    ~ SonAsylum aka Aaron
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by SonAsylum | [ Reply to This ]


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