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    dots Submission Name: tell medots

    Author: BrOkEn4gOoD
    ASL Info:    17/f/queens
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 20/12/14
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotstell medots

    im feeling you my baby,
    but you dont even notice me
    what do i have to do to get you
    to see that my love is real
    i see you wit dem other chicks
    but none compare to me
    i guess u want a sluty chick
    and not someone who
    wont give u pleasure like me
    tell me what i have to do
    cuz i cant take it no more
    my heart is on the line
    so dont break it no more
    tell me who i have to be
    other than what u see
    to get you to take another
    look at me and what we
    can be together
    tell me what you want
    to see to gte you to be with
    me i guess its not meant to be
    but i cant take it no more
    ill loving you everyday even
    when your far away i still
    be missing you even if you
    dont even miss me too
    just tell me......

    Submitted on 2006-10-18 12:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you have a typo but other then that it was good but the subject might afend people
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by vencix | [ Reply to This ]

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