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    dots Submission Name: Flute me away to Paradise 2dots
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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsFlute me away to Paradise 2dots
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    Walking alone, walking and smiling
    With fears that are no longer here,
    Into the deep blue sky I`m diving
    Caressing angels, and one deer.

    Feel my emotion, it`s so weak
    And sad, with tears crushed in one sorrow,
    I`m far away...they make me sick
    My statement stands, but who will follow?

    My wish is to be there
    There, where I can hear the sound,
    To take the sweet path and to know
    The secret lost...running too slow.

    Sempre lei, sempre with me
    I want her now, aujourd'hui
    Je ne sais pourquoi, pourquoi
    She wants to touch that silver croix.

    I love, there is no doubt about it
    I hate, that... you can see inside my eyes,
    I want, I cry, I pray...and need to hear it

    Flute me away to Paradise.




    Submitted on 2006-10-19 04:37:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was forced to put this into my favourites. My mind couldn't press the 'back' button with a clear conscience.
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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