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    dots Submission Name: A poem Within A Poemdots
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    Author: luvinanelevator
    ASL Info:    18/f/IN
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 4/19/17
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 552
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 728



    Description:
       this poem is origanally by Arnulfo J. Lopez.
    i don't know why i like this poem, i...just do i guess. tell me what you think. BE HONEST!


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    dotsA poem Within A Poemdots
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    Once I was pensive, very pensive
    Watching a mysterious, meloncolic poet
    writing a poem

    All he waqs writing
    Was a poem within a poem:

    A dark night of bitterness,
    The song of a bird,
    The solitude of Aurora,
    The smell of a rose
    Makes a poem within a poem

    Take this poem to a poet
    Who remembers a beloved who never comes-
    Take it to a disconsolate poet who wants to reach Diana
    Take it to a singer who wants a moon to fall in love
    To a man who feel the sadness of being alone
    To Neruda who once wrote the sad verses of the night
    To the passionate poet
    Who writes what comes from his heart.




    Submitted on 2006-10-19 14:07:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well, honestly it did make much sense to me, its like....

    "go on do it and see what happens"

    I am not clear what to say, but for some strange reason it made me smile.

    Cool.
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a good poem. But, and theres always a but, You lost me at the last stanza.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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