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    dots Submission Name: *Fallin' Leavesdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i wrote this in science class so it looked like i was doing my work...so it is probaly crap

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    dots*Fallin' Leavesdots

    swishing back and forth in the wind
    swirling 'round and 'round and 'round
    falling off trees and not wanting to hit the ground
    but once we do our journey's not over
    being raked to and fro
    with children jumping on us
    over and over and over again
    still the wind plays a big part
    spreading us over the lawn to be raked up again

    Submitted on 2006-10-19 14:07:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the images, though the repetition of round and over actually remind me of a carousel instead of leaves in Autumn The sibilance of Swishing and swirling, does remind me of the sounds of the wind blowing the leaves off the trees in Autumn. However, I probably have to agree with ShadowedAngel, it's a little wierd and the imagery was quite random, but 'tis good for a product of science class! :P
    | Posted on 2006-11-24 00:00:00 | by Morilla | [ Reply to This ]
      nah not crap really just a littel weird. It's alot easier to write about stuiff like this than you'd think isn't it
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]

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