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    dots Submission Name: Springdots
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    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsSpringdots
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    Spring whispers to me with chilly breath
    The sun-baked warmth of her sky
    Not quite reaching my skin
    She attempts to sweep the landscape
    Of the last remnants of Winter
    Kicking out the straggler hanging on
    The party's over, honey, time to go home
    Winter looks back
    Reluctantly releasing her hold upon the ground
    Leaving long, lingering gazes
    In midnight chills
    And the patter of raindrops in the gray dawn
    Spring persists, shoving Winter toward the door
    Tossing the reminders of her stay after her wake
    She then turns to me and speaks promises
    Convincing me of the new growth waiting beneath her surface
    She paints pastel pictures in tentative blooms
    That peek their heads out of the ground
    Like timid prarie dogs emerging to scout the area
    Then ducking back into their holes
    Disappearing from view
    Slowly the days warm
    And twilight delays his nightly visits
    The sun seems to wake up a bit earlier each day
    As Spring rousts him from his tepid bed
    Recapturing his hold upon each day
    Recapturing his hold upon me
    Spring gently takes my hand
    And we run free




    Submitted on 2004-05-26 09:48:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love how you personify the seasons in this piece, and give them strenghth and feeling in so doing. i could only WISH that spring OR winter was here right now... as florida summer's are the worst! gah! neat piece here.
    -dandan
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      Very, very well done. I haven't read a lot of poems where seasons and nature were personified in a way that worked so well. I don't have the blessing,curse to live in a place where we have to fight the winters to go away, but I could actually picture the remnants of snow on the ground while reading this.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by pinurplepassion | [ Reply to This ]


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