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    dots Submission Name: Who I amdots

    Author: CynicalxDreamer
    ASL Info:    31/m/7th Level of Hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 40/100/64
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Another poem from the viewpoint of Davan Gwydd, my childer of the Morrigan. And yes, I realize that there is no firm focus on his ramblings...its meant to be the ramblings of a mad man, a poet, and as he says 'the many faces of the suit'. If you don't get the reference...cards are called suits for the number and symbol.

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    dotsWho I amdots

    Existing within a dream
    Eyes open yet still asleep
    Life itself a waking nightmare
    With brief moments of splendor

    I am but a dreamer
    A fool of a romantic
    Who's one good quality
    Is as much a flaw as anything

    I am the jester
    The breaker of hearts
    As well as the destroyer
    Of my own

    Call me a knave
    A clown, an oaf
    And I will smile larger still
    While crying inside

    The show must go on
    And the village idiot
    Always has a part to play
    Whether wanted or not

    I am the joker in the deck
    The wild card of spades
    The king's buffoon
    And the queen's secret lover

    I am the cuckold
    And the betrayer
    The many faces of the suit
    And in the end...

    I'm holding all the aces
    And folding my hand
    On the table.

    Submitted on 2006-10-19 14:36:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh very good hand you have but a straight flush beats any 4 of a kind... this was very interesting and I enjoyed it also. for rambling this was pretty good.. and rambling helps get those things out which sometimes don't make sense.. so bravo ...

    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Um, WOW. This is really fantastic, I love it. What I especially enjoy is first of all, you make good use of poetic language. Second, the card analogies are what really makes this piece. Well done. Now, please be kind and comment on my latest work for it is lonely =]
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]

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