The People

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 69

Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic Total Views: 912 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 484

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The People

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What a scream What a face What a dark place With cobweb lace The death of a butterfly Questions why But the people only sigh As they watch an ally die The suffocating pride Kept the people wide eyed But they let the pain subside As another hero died The overdue sympathy Created only misery Confused the joker and his trickery As another lay in melancholy

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wow, good turn of words on this one! i am coming more and more to appreciate word slants instead of just old school nursery rhyme style. i really liked the short simplicity of the poem, but i didnt quite comprehend the full meaning, other than a general feeling of repulsion toward our calloused society. in that reguard i must humbly and disappointedly agree with you. thank you so much for sharing! ryeker

| Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]

i like this because it has a good rythem and flows well i love that it is very musterious and questionable. nice work i like this one. xx Chanyn

| Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Shark06 | [ Reply to This ]

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