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The People


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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Description:




The People



What a scream
What a face
What a dark place
With cobweb lace

The death of a butterfly
Questions why
But the people only sigh
As they watch an ally die

The suffocating pride
Kept the people wide eyed
But they let the pain subside
As another hero died

The overdue sympathy
Created only misery
Confused the joker and his trickery
As another lay in melancholy




Submitted on 2006-10-19 17:16:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, good turn of words on this one! i am coming more and more to appreciate word slants instead of just old school nursery rhyme style. i really liked the short simplicity of the poem, but i didnt quite comprehend the full meaning, other than a general feeling of repulsion toward our calloused society. in that reguard i must humbly and disappointedly agree with you. thank you so much for sharing!
ryeker
| Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this because it has a good rythem and flows well i love that it is very musterious and questionable. nice work i like this one.

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Chanyn
| Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Shark06 | [ Reply to This ]


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