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    dots Submission Name: Why do you hate me sodots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 831
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    Description:
       A poem about how an ex hates you for no reason....


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    dotsWhy do you hate me sodots
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    Look into my eyes
    And tell me the truth
    No more lies
    There is nothing to lose

    You look at me with such hatred
    It feels so bad
    I want to be dead
    Why do you have to be so mad?

    Is it cuz Iím not perfect
    Cuz I am fat or not hot
    Is it cuz I am everything
    That you donít want

    You loved me once
    and I loved you too
    My life used to be sunny
    My skies were so blue

    But now you hate me
    And I donít even know why
    And I all I seem to
    Want to do is cry.




    Submitted on 2006-10-19 20:07:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is alright, I guess- nothing special, but not horrible either. What this lacks, to me, is poetic usage. Your grammar isn't particularly good, and you basically just state things. Maybe try to exapnd your voacbulary just a bit. Now, please be kind and comment on my latest work, for it is lonely =]
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]


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