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    dots Submission Name: The Sindots
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    Author: Max R.
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33/29/17
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe Sindots
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    He said I was his sin
    He said he didn't care
    He said he'd begin
    and hoped i didn't scare

    Now im on the bed
    He's climbing off of me
    my eyes are running red
    This isnt how it should be

    He's saying i was good
    says i should be proud
    I'd kill him could
    how will i face the crowd?

    I hate his stupid house
    i hate his stupid wife
    i wish he was a mouse
    so i could end his life

    i'm supposed to trust you
    my love is wearing thin
    nothing you say is true
    you said i was your sin

    but i want to be your son.




    Submitted on 2006-10-19 22:45:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good god man. brutally honest here. a little graphic but nothing that jonathan davis didnt already say years ago. if this happened to you this is good for you, to be sharing and getting this out. if not you are just sick...-sin
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmm i liked the poem, but it made me want to cry. I hope things better for you, man.

    Katty
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by hellsangel | [ Reply to This ]
      okay WFT!?!?!?!?!?!?! what the hell is this about? i get the impression that this is about child molestation but i dont know....but its good none the less.....
    | Posted on 2006-10-19 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      it had good flow and a nice even rythem.....next time work on the touch ups a tad and perhaps give more to it..........i felt like i was picked up and dropped awfully fast.....give it more base, but all in all i was impressed
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by ropedpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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