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    Author: ropedpoet
    ASL Info:    21...male....cali
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 42/13/3
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       jus a little fuck around poem more effort and talent will be in other thanks! lol


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    Something so simple this jus can't be!,
    I've been ever so close but forever thwarted,
    sudden understanding always ends in maniacal glee!,
    So pleased my mission I never aborted.


    When I heard those words spoken in perfect clarity,
    She lead me into that unkown part of my self,
    I knew She gave Her gift in utter charity,
    What was once always avoided was yanked from its shelf.


    Her annalogy of never grabbing a cookie and settling for plain old milk,
    Yet be it interesting She mentioned oreos,
    Why that was as smooth as silk,
    She realsed Her known intel as a friend is what's even more-eos.


    Now stepping away with a greater weapon,
    Acknowledging who I am and what I may want,
    It's time to seek my goals and get to steppon!,
    Next time I may start with the font!








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      Haha. Pretty good for a "[censored] around poem" >.<

    I hope you write more poems soon!

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    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by XxXPromiseMeXxX | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Hmm I'm not usually one for looong comments, but i feel i should take this poem apart piece by piece lol I will probably be WAY off but hell cant hate a girl for trying ok now lets start first of all in the lines

    "Something so simple this jus can't be!,
    I've been ever so close but forever thwarted,"


    on the word "jus" did you mean just? hmm well if you did you misspelled that. (shakes finger at you) ok neway! I believe these lines are about some of your ex's about how you loved them and got so close to them but they backstabbed you and left you to die... (Theoretically speaking)

    hmm ok now for the next!!!

    "sudden understanding always ends in maniacal glee!,
    So pleased my mission I never aborted."

    Hmm.. prehaps its talking about how you think everytime you fall in love it always seems to end and hurt you, but your not the one giving up on the love they are. Anyway tell me if im right lol. next!



    "When I heard those words spoken in perfect clarity,
    She lead me into that unkown part of my self,"

    Hmm first of all you spelled unknown wrong in the second line. Ok as far as the writing goes is this talking about how this girl told you she loved you and she helped you find the part of yourself you had lost because of previous relationships and being broken? Hmm anyway next i suppose.

    "I knew She gave Her gift in utter charity,
    What was once always avoided was yanked from its shelf."

    hmm her gift... was this prehaps her love? and the sentence "What was once always avoided was yanked from its shelf." was this refering to how your heart had been on a shelf high trying to shild yourself from being hurt again but she managed to yank it down and you fell for her.. hard. hmm ok next.

    "Her annalogy of never grabbing a cookie and settling for plain old milk,
    Yet be it interesting She mentioned oreos,"

    hmm first of all you mispelled analogy and as for this sentence at first it threw me off but i think i understand. when this girl left you, you felt like less of a person than other men hmm and she could not settle for you but she wanted more so you felt like you were kinda inferior? hmm anyway next

    "Why that was as smooth as silk,
    She realsed Her known intel as a friend is what's even more-eos."

    Hmm im honesely not sure at all about this one my best guess is either one she believed a friend over you and she trusted him/her over you or when she became a friend you still wanted more because you still loved her?
    hmm now for the next line.

    "Now stepping away with a greater weapon,
    Acknowledging who I am and what I may want,"

    umm is this one saying like she left you and you just step away not trying to cause her pain and you have grown stronger from the loss and have learned more about yourself?
    next...

    "It's time to seek my goals and get to steppon!,
    Next time I may start with the font!"

    is this saying like its time to get over her and start another poem with a new mind set and attitude?

    lol anyway im probably wrong on like all of that but thatís what i got out of it, it was truly a beautiful piece i love cryptic stuff keep up the wonderful work mi Amor.

    ~ Love
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Bloody_Rain | [ Reply to This ]


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