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    dots Submission Name: Testimonialdots

    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1198


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    Morrows and eventides gracing me in condemnation
    I feel my soul unspoiled scorching into the fields of
    And I would take thee as companion
    If my blood was not as jaded
    But 'tis the season of open skies and dancing trees
    You cannot leave thy home behind
    Even as I would wish you to
    My heart has never been welcomed by selflessness
    And the hour is as dark as you can imagine
    When the waters can stir and windmills can sing
    And reality is blasphemous in the eye of the beholder
    Draw your curtains
    Watch me not as my footsteps fade
    I have found my way to glory, praise my fate
    If I can die with a sheated blade I will mourn no life
    'Tis the sin that will live and the valor that will burn
    How do I lead you into that
    It is the brink of my conscience where I could never find peace
    It is this testament that I will behold as victorious
    When the rage dies down and everything calms
    I will shead a tear for you then
    May you catch it in your sleep
    When we are both at peace
    And your cheek is left unstained

    Submitted on 2006-10-20 05:49:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah my friend, if I could add all your work to my favourites list I would willingly do so. This is a beautiful flowing story captured so nicely, wait, nice is not the word, wonderfully, captured inside a poem, and does indeed reinforce the fact that a poem is the best way to get things across.

    If I can die with a sheated blade I will mourn no life

    Beautiful statement, my favourite among this piece, just drives the soul wild, "sheated blade" especially.
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmm, thanks for the comment. Your -TESTIMONIAL- really impressed me. You are good writer, keep writing and you will get much far. Testimonial goes to my Favourites also.
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by DAlin | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh your god... that is so awesome... It's like reading a story, except you've found a way to condense it into a page. The love, the strife, the redemption, it's beautiful. Defintely going to favs.

    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]

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