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    dots Submission Name: Dissolving clouds with my graspdots
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    Author: Aeruynh
    ASL Info:    21/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsDissolving clouds with my graspdots
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    A silent breeze,
    cooling flustered skin -
    Long days beneath the sun.
    Invicible fingers caress,
    awaken the sweet desire within.

    Elongated days under serene skies,
    trilling laughter creates the scene -
    Happiness in a bubble.

    Dark clouds forms in my mind,
    insanity pressing,
    demanding to expand.
    Why is it so, on this lovely day,
    that even my heart betrays
    the light for the dark?

    Elongated nights under starlit skies,
    icecold winds clutch the heart.
    Loneliness' embrace.

    Envisions in view,
    subject to relative reality.
    Happiness is to accept,
    the trudgings of quicksand, the cobwebs of the dark.
    State of mind is state of self , -
    Beware the fleeting passings
    of sanity's distress.




    Submitted on 2006-10-20 12:29:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked it, very deep and emotional. It made me feel like days were dragging on and on. I'd like to know if it had a specific meaning.
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by Shmagoogle | [ Reply to This ]


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