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    dots Submission Name: Love Gone Wrongdots

    Author: DanceADream
    ASL Info:    16 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 205/153/29
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 788
    Average Vote:    3.7500
    Bytes: 400

       help with a new title...i just kinda put that there because i didnt know what else to write.

    OK for obvioous reasons, im changing my poem theme from venting, to angst or w.e bc aparently, venting isnt appropriate for my poem. *rolls eyes* as for bullshi* commentors, PISS OFF. i dont mind my poem being bashed for its poor word choice, or bad whatever, but when u bash the theme just because its upsetting, that really ticks me off.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLove Gone Wrongdots

    Sick from heartache
    And great disdain
    Swearing emotions
    To maintain.

    Unenviable sadness
    Hardly a sight,
    Constantly feeling
    A Malicious trite.

    Draw your sword
    End my plague,
    Control life’s demise
    Breaths turn vague
    Before they die
    Tears emerge,
    Sorrows underlie
    Life’s dead reply.

    Submitted on 2006-10-20 12:29:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
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    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      I wanna give it more 5's, but it wont let me! Sorry, but yeah that means I like it(but you're obviousily not stupid, so that probabily wasn't necessary). I here these words as lyrics, and can imagine the music in my head. Kinda like cold, meets Mudvayne(new), with a touch of flyleaf! Yeah, deffinately. Well done, immensly beautiful, and I honestly see noithing worth schanging that would make it better!
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      number 1 - It only says that it is venting. That doesn't make it [censored]ty teen angst poetry by nature.

    Number 2- By your logic then, I told you to just ignore me in my response if you like writing this [censored]. So why bother writing me back at all?

    Number 3 - This site is all about opinions. Feel free to express yours at well. However don't bring your little whiny punk teen ass onto my page and start cursing up a storm at me. Understand. Now go piss up a rope, junior.
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of depressing? I did like your use of words and I could picture it in my mind. Anyway good write!
    kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      You do define Angst my friend.
    Its all so obvious, do not defend!
    This Poetry here is all the rage
    You'll see it on every other page!
    I hate my mother, I want to die,
    I'll kill myself, I'm so fukcing High.
    So Let us all just elevate,
    and face the facts. Do not debate.
    Put down the razor, let's not slit our wrists
    though I know right now you are SO pissed.
    And here I sit upon my throne
    Passing judgement, pulling my bone
    If writing this siht makes you happy,
    then go right on ahead just ignore me.

    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]

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