Description: SOmething random I wrote in creative writing. We were suposed to take our inspiration from the song "Cat's in the Craddle" if you never heard it it is about a boy wanting to be like his father but him never really being there. Anyway, please comment. Enjoy.
Now this is great! It caught me off guard! Wonderful work! You did it perfectly for having to describe a child wanting to be like their father, but him never being there. I couldn't have done a better job myself, bravo!
No, no, no.! This is just great as it is. Why do so many people want to take a little gem and turn it into a lump of Stonehenge stone? You have genuinely captured the "Why?" element that is so tied up and inescapable in the child, the "Can I?" constant repetition that makes them children. This is a double whammy - an absolute "WOW"!!!