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    dots Submission Name: Lifedots
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    Author: Max R.
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 33/29/17
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLifedots
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    One boy, one girl
    two hearts beating freely
    for a while they had it all
    then life intervined
    and said it coulnt be

    That one boy
    grew up to be a man
    and was forver angry
    he stole that car
    and landed in jail
    always thinking of

    That one girl
    grew into a woman
    and was always drunk
    she stole that money
    and was always thinking of that

    One boy, one girl
    two hearts beating freely
    for a while they had it all...




    Submitted on 2006-10-20 15:34:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      okay this is a small story here. not bad either. a good read, coming of age is good subject matter anytime cause it can be related to by people of all walks of life. this one is well put though. i like it. from the heart is the only way to be. thanks -sin
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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