I could be wrong here, but at least from my own point of view, 'The Sin' could be meaning lust? Or want? Not sure exactly, but from what I've read...
The words abandon, longing, burning....they are all words used to describe some type of hunger we all have inside of us, and with the talk of satan, poison darts etc.... I tend to get the feeling that there's lust playing upon these words you've written...please explain if I'm wrong. But if I'm right, I loved the way you've described this feeling in an abstract sort of way.
This is another Good write from you where I believe you were referring to how one cannot live without Grief and happiness Every person does feel both emotions but it is how you deal with the grief that can always leave one happier then sad I have always said there is a positive to every negative affecting us It is when we find that positive that that negative leads to happiness Very Nicely worded I enjoy reading your poetry I love the meassage hidden behind your words Great Job God Bless Ron
i think it's fine as it is, us readers can use our imaginations as to the story behind this. it is a beautiful piece, it's vagueness adds to the mystique. i think it's lovely the way it is. you just can't please everyone, huh? lol whirl**
Hmmm, well the thing is with this poem is that it sounds beautiful, sure, but it doesn't really seem to have much of a premise. I agree with PoeticNonsense in that I have difficulty actually understanding the poem. Some clarity would help.
Now, as reciprocity is my policy, please comment back on one of my works =]
i think you have a typo in line 2 (abandon). its short, but powerful, nonetheless. i cant pretend that i really get all of it, but that doesnt really matter. i like the violin reference...very good indeed. what do you mean be satan's score? like i said, this might be how you meant it to be, people getting different things out of it. anyway, really good write. keep it coming.