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    dots Submission Name: The Sindots

    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Sindots

    A single violin plays
    of graveyard abandon
    from the hands of God
    to our hearts
    Leaves us longing for more
    from satan's score
    The burning dance
    of the poisen darts.

    Submitted on 2006-10-20 20:56:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I could be wrong here, but at least from my own point of view, 'The Sin' could be meaning lust? Or want? Not sure exactly, but from what I've read...

    The words abandon, longing, burning....they are all words used to describe some type of hunger we all have inside of us, and with the talk of satan, poison darts etc.... I tend to get the feeling that there's lust playing upon these words you've written...please explain if I'm wrong. But if I'm right, I loved the way you've described this feeling in an abstract sort of way.

    Great write :)

    In the blink of an eye,

    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another Good write from you where I believe you were referring to how one cannot live without Grief and happiness
    Every person does feel both emotions but it is how you deal with the grief that can always leave one happier then sad
    I have always said there is a positive to every negative affecting us
    It is when we find that positive that that negative leads to happiness
    Very Nicely worded
    I enjoy reading your poetry
    I love the meassage hidden behind your words
    Great Job
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i think it's fine as it is, us readers can use our imaginations as to the story behind this.
    it is a beautiful piece, it's vagueness adds to the mystique. i think it's lovely the way it is. you just can't please everyone, huh? lol
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, well the thing is with this poem is that it sounds beautiful, sure, but it doesn't really seem to have much of a premise. I agree with PoeticNonsense in that I have difficulty actually understanding the poem. Some clarity would help.

    Now, as reciprocity is my policy, please comment back on one of my works =]
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you have a typo in line 2 (abandon). its short, but powerful, nonetheless. i cant pretend that i really get all of it, but that doesnt really matter. i like the violin reference...very good indeed. what do you mean be satan's score? like i said, this might be how you meant it to be, people getting different things out of it. anyway, really good write. keep it coming.
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]

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