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Between You And Me


Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 130
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1152
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Between You And Me



Why don't you say anything to me?
You're always so silent.
Why don't you hold my hand?
You're always so distant.
Why don't you like me?
It's in your eyes.

I don't want to hurt you,
and I stay silent.
I don't want to leave you,
and I stay away.
I don't want to like you,
Stop looking at my eyes.


You won't hurt me,
I promise.
You won't leave me,
I know it.
You won't like me,
Why?

You're everything to me,
I don't want to lose you.
I'd never like you
because I went directly
to loving you.




Submitted on 2006-10-21 01:26:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was wonderful! At first i thought it was going to be heart breaking but it turned out to be a happy ending:) very nice!
| Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwww I really like it once i got to the end At first i was thinking you need to be more creative with your words but its simplicity makes the ending even better...other wise u would lose its I geuss the word is magic.....that was ausome!
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by lah | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow...
its amazing
your a great at this
keep it up
would u happen 2 have aim or msn
| Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Spazxx | [ Reply to This ]


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