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    dots Submission Name: Satan's Crossdots

    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I can't tell if this is good or not.
    ...And no, I'm not a Satanist.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSatan's Crossdots

    Paint your hands on Satan's cross;
    red nails with frozen tips.
    Morning air is flammable
    like butane on my lips.
    Wrap your thorns around my hips
    and motivate the sin
    to rise before summer's light
    learns how to singe the skin.

    Paint your feet on Satan's shoes
    with concrete heels and toes.
    Tell the world to follow you
    and watch the gruesome shows.
    As the putrid morning glows,
    your eyes, deep and perverse,
    signal them from innocence
    and off to join that hearse.

    Submitted on 2006-10-21 05:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this. No, you aren't a satanist... and this piece holds a brilliant way to illustrate the way we give into sin and temptation even when we know that the outcomes of it have a high potential for cumbustion. Very well done.

    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by giventofly | [ Reply to This ]
      to me this means something. it reminds me of how i can sometimes paint a picture of myself and warp all truths in a bizarrely human way. i become like the character of satan.
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by DBC | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really love this nikki!!its awsome it has so much feeling and emotion burning through absoulutly wonderfull!
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      It has been forever since I've gotten around to reading anything lately on this site! I've missed reading your stuff, cause it's soooo brilliant! This was a really awesome one, too - I especially loved:

    "Morning air is flammable
    like butane on my lips."

    Okay, I'm off to catch up on more of your stuff!


    ~Mandi Gayle~
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love the way that you write,
    It's almost like "Morbid Beuity" and I have to tell you putting those two words together is not an easy feat. I would love to see the world through your eyes for a day, you see a lot of references about God in poetry ( I'm Guilty) because it is easy to fit him into fantasy and feeling, but all of the poems that I have read about Saten are written by hateful youth and are usually about killing of some sort, you almost danced a ballet with him, Kudos,
    Will (Twice)
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Twice | [ Reply to This ]
      way neat! it's a bit different from your usual writes i thinks
    i had to read it like four times over to understand this one part:
    "Wrap your thorns around my hips
    and motivate the sin
    to rise before summer's light
    learns how to singe the skin"
    because the "...summer's light learns..." part confused me ^_^
    i actually completely failed to connect this piece to Satanism at all
    i just thought it was a twist on what you normally write about. nevertheless, it is an amazing piece with abstract descriptions as usual!
    you amaze my mind ;)
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by LoneWolf | [ Reply to This ]
      You always seem to amaze me Nikki! This was wonderful! I like the playful just of evil in this LOL Anyway added it to my fav's keep um comming K
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      You know you are absolutely fascinating, i dont know how you do it, where do you get the muse to put a piece like this together. You are a scientific wonder you know.

    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good
    I mean really really good
    You showed that Satanists are people who only think of themselves and are eager to bring down someone else into the Negative world they have created with their own mind
    I Love the way you put this together
    I respectively disagree with Dismentled
    Satanists nust certainly are EVIL
    they live in the Negative and are so Happy with their Negatives self that the only way they know how to put the Positive Energy that is hidden in their soul into full effect is by bringing their negativity on to others selfishly
    Excellent Write
    I Loved this
    It definately speaks TRUTH
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      that is so sweet and romantic. KInda like a love-story! Oh, and for the record Satanists are NOT evil! Satanists don't even believe in satan, they only use his image for what it serves;as self-gratification, selfishness, living not in shame; things of that sort. It's the "Satan worshipers" you've to watch out for. The funny thing is, that Satan worshipers are actaully christians, by technicallity! Christian: An individual who believes that Jesus Christ was/is the son of god" By deffinition(and yes my demented self actaully got into an arguement with a preacher over this, he copped out, pusssy was afraid of losing!) Anyways, this in a way is kinda sweet, bitter-romantic. You know what they say though "dance with the devil; the devil don't change, you do!" Wondering I somehow inspire this? I vaguely remember a write the other day about "hanging me from a black cross"? peace sweet thing!
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Morning air is flammable
    like butane on my lips.

    Awesome image. Double plus love it. I don't really understand its meaning. But However I do understand the feeling. Nice imagery. Love that line line.

    Morning air....

    awsome thought
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. There was a contrast between the two stanzas, the first being personal to the reader like
    "Paint your hands
    your thorns"
    It had a carnival of horror feel to me in the second stanza which became less personal and chaotic
    "Tell the world to follow you
    and watch the gruesome shows."
    Or maybe not now that I read over it again..
    What the [censored] am I on about?

    I'll be honest, I can't write. I'm really hungover
    Good job though, honestly
    *falls asleep*

    - Sethesin
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]

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