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    Author: imported_air
    ASL Info:    15/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    1.3 - 1/5/4
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 564
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    Dear Sheehan,

    I guess people never really change.
    Everyone I love is tangled up in this web.
    And I can only cut so many strings for you.
    I'm sick of trying to figure you out.

    This time I get a front row seat to watch you crash and burn.
    This was so unexpected.
    After all the letters you wrote.
    You assured me you were done.

    Serious time is now, this was the last thing that was supposed to happen.
    I'm screaming for you, but you barely hear a whisper.

    A best friend would listen.
    So what are you?




    Submitted on 2006-10-21 11:56:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      now i guess you see what i've seen. you're going through what i did... and i hate to say it but you should probably give up like i did. i gave up but at the same time i guess i didn't... because i still love him... he was my best friend all of last year. and i know he cares but yet, he doesn't. everything is a contradiction with him and i feel like there is no hope for him anymore. i'm sorry you had to go through it too. i'm sorry you're still going through it now. i'm sorry people don't change.
    | Posted on 2006-11-03 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. It has such a gritty, realistic feeling to it. I have a friend as well who has truobles like this, they never seem to get how important they are to other people. I loved the part "I can only cut so many strings for you", I can really relate to that frustrating feeling of thinking you have done everything toi help but its not working. That last line is especially powerful. I really love your unique writing style, you have talent. Nice job.
    -Katherine Elisabeth
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Kehuther115 | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


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