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Submission Name: my depresion dots

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Author:	Ryou_Bakura
ASL Info:	16/f/mi
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 35/43/13
Words:	86

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	128
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okay I suffer from a 24-7 depression and every time I fall to it I fond it harder and harder to get out of it. right now I can't

my depresion dots

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Tears running down my face,
I don’t know why they keep flowing,
I didn’t do anything,
And nobody’s hurt me,
I wonder why staying at the crystal screen ,
I’m not sobbing, I’m just breathing,

I fall on the floor finally sobbing,
I don’t know why
But I just keep crying,
Everything hurts,
And I’m so tired,

I lay in my sorrow,
And wonder what is going on,
I fall to my depression,
Falling deeper and deeper,
And some day I will never return.

Submitted on 2006-10-21 19:09:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey wow i realy like this poem... so far i haev read a few of your things and I realy love what I haev read... keep up the good work and the one thing that has helped me when i am depresed(which is almost always) is writting....
well hey I would realy like to know what you think about some of my writting so try and stop by and tell me what you think...

With all my heart amanda aka Candy

| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
  I care for your protection love, but please, don't fall to your depression, well, try not to let it get to your heart or mind. I think it's the corruption, or actually it is. Just don't hurt yourself, for my sake, Love ya.
| Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Trevelyan | [ Reply to This ]
  hi, this is better, and your replies are very good. poe
| Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  OMG i loved this my fave line was I’m not sobbing, I’m just breathing, i felt like i understood it like i had been there myself wich i havent i dont think cause im not sure i have ever been depressed in fact i have a problem crying meaning i dont do it ever hmm maybe thats it i am a bit jealous who cares aboyut me point is i loved this i really did
| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
  I hate to break it to you guys, but alot of perscription depression medication does work for the most part, without the before mentioned 'zombie effects' lol, Sometimes of course. It's beena while since I've been on any.

And, Tsk. Weed, isn't a good alt!

But, on the techniqual aspects of this.. I didn't really care for the format, but thats a personal choice in how we decide to write, so I won't complain about that.

" lay in my sorrow,
And wonder what is going on,
I fall to my depression,
Falling deeper and deeper,
And some day I will never return"

That was probably my favorite portion of this, I think it expressed your confusion, and depression, etc. the best. because it took all the things you were feeling, and really flowed them together.

Nice Job, and I hope you do indeed get this straightened out.

| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah. It's like I don't really like the tehnical aspects of this poem but I can totally relate to the feelings behind it.Oscura is right about the pills, they turn you into a living zombie, if you wish to do that you'd be better of with weed, it still turns you into a zombie but atleast it makes you happy. :)
| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm.. I really liked this piece it decribs how i feel alot.. you dont know why your crying... but you do.. in your subconscicnce its called cronic depression thats why we are depressed 24/7 but i sure as hell aint takeing any pills.. although sometimes it helps to cry as in your poem im not sure if it helps you but it always does me kinda .. anyway great write keep it up.
~ Love timely
| Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by Oscura | [ Reply to This ]

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