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    dots Submission Name: Where Love Goes to Diedots
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    Author: pinurplepassion
    ASL Info:    24/f/somewhere in TX
    Elite Ratio:    5.92 - 165/146/17
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1451
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       I wrote this piece quite some time ago, but I haven't been able to get the creative juices going in a couple days so I thought I would submit it and see what you think.


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    dotsWhere Love Goes to Diedots
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    The place where waves stop crashing,
    And stars refuse to shine
    Where Heaven's just a mystery,
    To body soul and mind.

    A place where hearts stop beating,
    And birds refuse to sing
    A place where you look inside yourself
    And don't see anything.

    A place so full of sorrow,
    That even trees are blue
    A place that knows no meaning
    A place that knows no you.

    This is a place I've been to
    One too many times,
    A place where dreams get shattered,
    It's where love goes to die






    Submitted on 2004-05-26 11:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very well done, normally when writers try to rhyme, it turns out horribly, but the rhyme in this... it works. I think thats a pretty dang good compliment.
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by peoplekityo | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so very sad and poignant. the rhyme works well here and doesn't stumble. it just reads like a heart breaking... *ouch*
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This work flowed very well, it had a good rhythm and the subject was very original in the way it was portrayed, nice job. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      i have a similar styled poem, only yours is better. it's like reading the lighting process of a stage - each part lighted differently and one at a time until you step back and the stage is ready for the players. melancholia beauty at it's best, very lovely to read. =]

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      p.s. forgive me that my comments are crappy. your poem has a deafening energy, like a silent movie. i will try to improve on my critiques.
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem sounds very depressing, which is why i love it ! the despair and frustration, reminds me when my uncle would make me watch jonathan livingston's seagull over and over. don't ask me why? i'm a weird one. i'm being honest of what came to mind. your poem made my day. today everything fit into place and your poem made for a good evening towards my slumber. buona notte
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by pioneerheart | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that you had some real great imagry in parts of your poem and i liked it . i liked the rhyming in this poem i thought it worked well
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]


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