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    dots Submission Name: Fearlessdots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 103/139/48
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       I guess I wrote this because I feel strong.


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    dotsFearlessdots
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    Never again,
    will I put myself in fear.
    For the serpent has passed.
    I laugh at my fear,
    for I have never needed it.

    I look to my left and right.
    I am whole.
    I have nothing to fear.
    I laugh at myself,
    for being so stupid.

    I look below, and above.
    Never had I known such fear.
    I let go, I fall to the ground.
    I laugh at myself once more.
    For I need no fear.

    I found you,
    your comfort,
    your love.
    I laugh out loud
    For I no longer have fear.

    Thank you,
    For everything you have shown me,
    taught me.
    It made me strong.
    And now I fear nothing.

    For you are with me.




    Submitted on 2006-10-21 19:54:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, i thought it was quite well thought out. how ever, the thought was implied of god but was never really explained. see you could take this as a love poem if you will. what does do it is the line about the serpent. now that would explain a little more of the story, i get it now. sorry. hey it was good.
    Thnks, DEATH
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... I liked it.. i'm not really much of a religious person but in this poem i loved it. prolly cuz it has so much to do with fear and i have been scared most of my life from one thing or another but yea God does make that fear cease and puts the mind at rest and for that im thankful also i loved how you worded it.. an exellent flow of emotions keep up the wonderous work!!

    ~Love Timly
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Oscura | [ Reply to This ]


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