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    dots Submission Name: You Or Me?dots
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    Author: WinterInJuly
    Elite Ratio:    1.28 - 5/21/39
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I literaly JUST wrote this poem based off of something my friend, Stef, brought up. Enjoy!


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    dotsYou Or Me?dots
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    Faith, you fickle friend!
    You fiend!
    You come and go as you please,
    Leaving me behind to stare at your dust in awe.

    Where did you go!

    I wonder so quickly to myself,
    Your disappearance is so urgent and unpredictable.
    In one moment, I am sure of myself.
    The next,
    I am not worthy of the good things that could rain on me!

    Then, you dare to return!
    Oh, you defiant one!
    There you go, placing yourself in my lap,
    Just to look at me with those innocent eyes.
    You stir such joy in me at those times!

    If only I could realize, that it is not you at all
    Who is the fickle one.
    For it is I,
    With my lack of belief and security,
    That lets your slick body slip from my grasp
    Every
    Single
    Damn
    Time!




    Submitted on 2006-10-21 21:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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