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    dots Submission Name: Define Fake For Medots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 470
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
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    dotsDefine Fake For Medots
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    FAKE (n. / adj.) -anything made to appear otherwise than it actually is; counterfeit; to pretend something in which is otherwise.


    girls.


    girls.
    are mean, and heartless,
    and cold. and jealous. what?
    that's right, i said it. jealous.


    did i stutter?



    girls.

    let me tell you something
    that you should never forget.
    i will always be prettier
    than your personality
    i will always be prettier
    than your crooked smile

    fake.

    "all the way from her dyed hair
    to her abercrombie jeans."
    so what i dye my hair. and i wear
    hollister. "fake". that's me.

    that's sarcasm


    her name is kim. or nicole.
    or something. i don't care.
    i don't know her.
    but she's "heard all about me" so she
    knows she doesn't like me.
    i'm sorry, what was your name?
    thanks for taking the time
    to talk about me. thanks for making
    me the center of your world.

    that's genuine.

    glare.

    keep staring, i love it.

    "look at her she's so ugly."
    then why am i surrounded
    by your boyfriends?
    "look at her, she's so dumb."
    well, i'm smart enough to know
    that i don't need your approval.
    "look at her, she's so conceited."
    no, i'm just happy with myself.
    "look at her, she'll never be like us"

    i know.


    talk.


    keep talking.

    you know me so well.
    don't you? you think so.
    tell me girls, why do i
    constantly forget you exist?
    tell me girls, why do you
    care what i do? tell me
    girls, why do you obsessively
    ask about me?
    i suggest you get a life
    and stop looking into mine

    fake.

    you're right.
    i do pretend.
    to know your name.
    to accept your apology.
    i do pretend.
    when i acknowledge you
    in public,when i
    include you in conversations.
    when i speak to you with a
    smile. fake. you've got me
    figured out. but i've got you
    on far worse grounds.

    fake.

    your clothes are just like mine.
    your music is just like mine.
    your friends are just like mine.
    your makeup, your hair, your words.
    looks as though i've got some
    competition for that label.

    next time you talk.

    talk loud.
    next time you hurt.
    make it bleed.
    next time to you see me.
    i'll see right through.

    that's a promise

    you don't want fake friends?
    i don't want fake enemies.
    stab me in the back a little
    harder, i keep forgetting to
    feel the sting.


    conclusion:


    a sharp tounge slits it's own throat.
    so with any luck, you'll keep talking.




    Submitted on 2006-10-21 23:01:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved it! Really, I honestly did. I mean there is no complete structure but it keeps me going, whats going to happen next? Its like...all the arguements I have ever had with people...like the ones which are pointless and go no where, this is what I was trying to say but they wouldnt listen. Really, really, really enjoyed it, very well written. I think I may even put it on my favorites :) Great job.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved it! Really, I honestly did. I mean there is no complete structure but it keeps me going, whats going to happen next? Its like...all the arguements I have ever had with people...like the ones which are pointless and go no where, this is what I was trying to say but they wouldnt listen. Really, really, really enjoyed it, very well written. I think I may even put it on my favorites :) Great job.

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved it! Really, I honestly did. I mean there is no complete structure but it keeps me going, whats going to happen next? Its like...all the arguements I have ever had with people...like the ones which are pointless and go no where, this is what I was trying to say but they wouldnt listen. Really, really, really enjoyed it, very well written. I think I may even put it on my favorites :) Great job.

    -Rande
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually loved this piece. At the beginning, I wasnt sure of it. But once I knew what was going on, I loved it. I have actually experianced this, even though I am only 13. Many people think that to experiance things like this, but you have to be us, to know what we are going through. As Dancing Alone said, everything DOES happen behind closed doors. Everyone IS fake, and they do not want to show their true indentity so they act as someone else. But if being "fake", is being yourself, then I have no problem with that. I am "fake" too. And I am also adding this as a fave. It just sliced right through me to my heart. Good work!
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by brokenxheartedx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow,that was nice ..
    A little confusing to me maybe but its definitely original/personal. I think itsa fav coz i liked it alot. everyone's fake.Yea it all goes on behind closed doors but it's just a better idea to ignore it all.And its also true how sometimes they care all because you don't.
    um,the title was a little misleading.
    but still,i'm makin it a fav.!
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]


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