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    dots Submission Name: NIGHT ARTISTdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNIGHT ARTISTdots
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    Tonight you are my shelter.
    You are every rhythm ,ever song.
    It can last forever or just an hour.
    Doesnt matter not to me, not tonight .
    I will let you cover me, hide me in your light.
    I only wished youd let me finish .
    The drink.
    The evenings painting.
    I wish you hadnt turned the light on .
    Everything is more beautiful in the dark.
    So ok you found me here
    Seems pathetic I am sure.
    Think whatever you like tonight.
    In your arms the anger leaves for a moment .
    I am someones something.
    There is peace in that .





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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with you on one thing: 'everything is more beautiful in the dark' . I think the same way. My inspirations almost always hits at night. There was another line I liked:
    'I am someones something
    There is peace in that' . this is true. A realistic POV expressed in an unexpected manner: 'someones something'. Good piece.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      nice job hideing what is going on. takes you half the popme cause your thinking one thing then you read something eles and it all comes to gether. really nice job I like thing thing about 'hideing me in your light' that was realyl g oI like that line. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]


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